Faye’s essay on microchip implantation

                                                                            

    For reasons of convenience some people have proposed the touchable/ tactile/ paper ID cards to (SUBJUNCTIVE!!) be abolished and give way to the implantation of ID microchips under peoples’ skin. In my opinion, if this happens, the daily life of people would be improved  and simplified.

   This practice would facilitate a lot of processes and circumstances .Because of the (promptness) easy accessibility to/ availability of the personal information, people could avoid  difficult situations and possible dangers. A characteristic example would be a case of someone who experiences an allergy shock and due to the readily available information  on his their health that is visible with a simple scanning of their chip, COMMA HERE and others can help him/ them because they know his/their history . The resolution of this incident would be definitely faster, reducing the rate of risk .Another example would be the case of a thief that enters a shop and other people around him can see timely see his criminal record and be more alert ed. (so should everyone be alert simply because a person with a criminal record enters a shop or is this person there about to commit robbery? It is rather unclear.)

   Another vital reason that (I’m) I AM (no short forms!) in favor of the chip implant is the saving of time (and) as well as plastic or paper. NowAdays, COMMA (are spent) a lot of time is spent for the documents to be created .For example, COMMA when an entrepreneur wants to apply for a loan, they must devote time to explain at the administration of the bank what they owner they owe or how much money he has/ they have, although it would be much more easier for the bank to read the data of (ID) the microchip implant in a few seconds. Another also/equally significant (consumption) consideration is those the overconsumption of paper and plastic that are IS (uncountable!) necessary for the natural data common paper ID cards to be created and other data logs to be kept. From my personal experience, COMMA in my country citizens are obliged to show their ID plastic card ,documentation of their income , driver’s license or a documentation about their family circle if they are asked; SEMI COLON otherwise, COMMA they will pay a fine.

  It seems that (the establishment of this practice  have two basic reasons to happen)--> there are two basic reasons for establishing this practice/ microchip implantation. Governments of all over the world should realize that they must vote for practices that they will facilitate peoples’ life and, of course, they that will deter the environmental detriment/ damage.

Faye, I know your grammar is much better than this! Why are there still so many missing words, punctuation problems and wrong verbs? Take a careful look at my suggestions so that we can discuss them later. Practice makes perfect, so keep writing! Christina 💚