Essay on microchips

 A great deal of controversy surrounds the insertion of microchips under people's body. More and more people tend to support the use of microchip on the grounds that in today's modernized society everybody should follow this innovative role model. From my perspective,  I believe that microchips are such a devastate tool that it is capable of changing humanity life.
 It is known the fact that everyone is under consideration of implanted microchips. There are several reasons why microchips are going to affect in a negative way life. First of all,  it is vital need to highlight that humanity have some fundamental rights struggling too hard to assert and protect them in a very tough way . One of them is freedom, which it will easily be eroded if microchips are inserted.  Not only will personal information  have been  record but also the authorities will spot trails in no time by using GPS setting. Therefore, there is no freedom for nobody. Moreover,  microchips is going to humiliate life . In some cases people are told to obey states' orders and not allowing them to do their personal preferences.
  Everyone should bare in mind that it is important for people to align with novel facts of life because world is getting modernized very quickly.  When it comes to deal with these situations such as using microchips for a life ,it is of primary importance to be used critical thinking.  There are  few people who have wondered if microchips are a tremendous alarm for human health care. Noone could promise that inserting these, no other substances will not be injected.  If possible,  people will face detrimental  ailments such as skin's cancer . Last but not least,  microchips are produced by laboratories, thus, it is bound that human immune system could probably reject it.
 Taking everything into account, the obvious conclusion to be drawn is that microchips may not be the ideal solution monitoring people's activities in order to create a cohesion. In my mind , I believe that microchips will spawn harmful consequences to people and noone could not sharply react to this.

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 A great deal of controversy surrounds the insertion of microchips into people's body. More and more people tend to support the use of microchip on the grounds that in today's modernized society everybody should adopt this innovative practice. From my perspective,  I believe that microchips are such a devastating tool that it is capable of changing human life/ humanity forever.

 It is a well-known fact that everyone is under consideration for implanted microchips. There are several reasons why microchips are going to affect life negatively. First of all,  it is a vital need to highlight that all individuals have some fundamental rights which they are struggling too hard to assert and protect passionately . One of them is freedom, which it will easily be eroded if microchips are inserted.  Not only will personal information  be constantly recorded, but also the authorities will spot trails of everybody's daily activity in no time by using the  GPS tracking system setting. Therefore, there is no freedom for nobody. Moreover,  microchips are going to humiliate life . In some cases people are told to obey the state's orders which will not allow them to pursue their dreams and goals. (this is a little unclear here- will the state control people through the microchips?)

  Everyone should bear in mind that it is important for people to align with novel technologies because the world is getting modernized/ is progressing very quickly.  When it comes to dealing with these situations, COMMA such as using microchips for life ,it is of primary importance to employ (=use) critical thinking.  There are  few people who have wondered if microchips are a tremendous risk/ hazard/ peril for human health care. No-one can promise that when inserting these, no other substances will not be injected or no other complications will occur.  (never a double negative, remember?).  In the worst-case scenario,  people may face detrimental  ailments/ fatal conditions, such as skin's cancer . Last but not least,  microchips are produced by laboratories; SEMI COLON HERE thus, it is bound that the human immune system could probably reject them.

 Taking everything into account, the obvious conclusion to be drawn is that microchips may not be the ideal solution since they will bring about the incessant/ constant monitoring of people's activities in order to create a cohesion. In my mind , I believe that microchips will spawn harmful consequences to people and no-one could not sharply react to this. ,which cannot easily be denied nor embraced.

That is one more good effort Charalambos! Grammar is getting constantly better!

Be careful with overusing opinion phrases: To my mind, I believe, From my perspective, I think are used separately, not in combination.

Also, pay attention to the unclear part at the end of paragraph 2. What do you mean by that? Remember that when you confuse the reader or go off topic, marks may be removed!

I loved the use of certain advanced expressions, such as 'it is bound that'. You can do it, blogger! Keep writing and reflecting on the comments! Christina 💪💗😏

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Slides on world hunger and ways to fight it

https://www.slideshare.net/cm24/hunger-and-poverty-ecpe-discussion 

GM food!

  Nowadays a problem of genetically modified food is widespread all over the world. More and more genetically modified food appear in our life. Gm foods designed to cover people's consumption.These products have high nutrional values and have the privilege of long duration. However, thera are opinions about potential risks and ethical concerns which have still debaded. So, should genetically modified crops advance in agricultural?
   In my opion, the genetically modified foods are beneficial in our life. Such a population increase, so the consumption icrease too. The agriculture can not afford this consumption.Genetically modified foods can replace the genuine foods.There are products that are modified crop, like soya. Soya originated from bean with icludes high protein. Most people choosing to eat meatless foods and soya helps for it. If people consume soya, the consumption will reduce.The food do not enough for all population.If there are abundant products, hunger and hamine will reduce! People go hungry either because they can not afford or because they do not have access to land on which they could grow it themselves.
   There is an another people's category believe that genetically modified foods should be banned,because these products are prone to diseases cause health problems and allergies.The modified DNA cause health problems because the human do not absorb them and it is dangerous to eat these products. Some products have different shape and taste with full of growth hormones. The most drawback of genetically modified foods is hormones. All diseases are caused from hormones and this is the reason for people choosing biological products.
   In sum up, the genetically modified food contribute in abundance products. Most people die from malnutrition which is serious problem from humanity.Even people bevieve that modified foods are unhealthy, we hold the production of these foods. Trangenic crops will make a decisive contribution to winning the war against hunger!


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  Nowadays, COMMA the problem of genetically modified food is widespread all over the world. More and more genetically modified food appears in our life. GM foods are designed to cover people's consumption rates.These products have high nutritional values and have the privilege of a long duration because of the changes scientists have made to these plants' genetic code. However, there are opinions about potential risks and ethical concerns which have are still being debated. So/ Therefore, should genetically modified crops continue being used in agriculture?

I have now broken down your paragraph in parts to better explain what I mean.

   In my opinion, the genetically modified foods are beneficial in our life. FIRST ARGUMENT The population increases, so do the consumption rates. The agriculture cannot satisfy the rapidly increasing needs of consumers worldwide. Therefore, genetically modified foods can replace natural products to some extent.There are products that are from modified crops, like soya.

SECOND ARGUMENT Soya originated from a bean with includes high protein. Most people are now choosing to eat meatless foods and soya helps cover their natural need for protein. If people consume soya, the consumption of other products will reduce.

NOW YOU GO BACK TO THE FIRST ARGUMENT - why? This needs to be done immediately, as the food is not enough for all the population.If there are abundant GM products, which can easily be produced in mass quantities, hunger and famine rates are expected to fall. (NO EXCLAMATION MARKS IN ESSAYS)

THIRD ARGUMENT- WHERE IS THE LINKING WORD? People go hungry either because they cannot afford or because they do not have access to land on which they could grow it themselves.  ---> YOU NEED MORE EXPLANATION FOR THIS ARGUMENT

 The reader must easily understand the whole structure of the paragraph, so be careful! 💟

   There are some other people who believe that genetically modified foods should be banned no comma because these products are prone to diseases are likely to cause health problems and allergies.The modified DNA causes health problems there is no way to predict how the human organism will absorb it; consequently, it might be dangerous to eat these products. Some products have a different shape and taste and are full of growth hormones. The most significant drawback of genetically modified foods is hormones. All diseases are caused by hormones and this is the reason why people choose organic products.

   To sum up, the genetically modified food contributes to an abundance of available products. Most people die from malnutrition which is a serious problem for humanity.--> THIS IS AN ARGUMENT THAT COULD HAVE BEEN MENTIONED IN THE MAIN BODY: GM CROPS ARE A WAY TO FIGHT WORLD HUNGER Even if people believe that modified foods are unhealthy, governments should not disrupt the production of these foods. Transgenic crops will make a decisive contribution to winning the war against hunger. (no exclamation marks)

You ended with an argument which should have been analysed more in the main body. It is a difficult topic which you understood completely alone, so that is a solid effort! Keep studying, wonderful athlete and blogger! I am also going to post some slides which will help you all to understand this topic a little more. Christina 💘

Faye’s essay on microchip implantation

                                                                            

    For reasons of convenience some people have proposed the touchable/ tactile/ paper ID cards to (SUBJUNCTIVE!!) be abolished and give way to the implantation of ID microchips under peoples’ skin. In my opinion, if this happens, the daily life of people would be improved  and simplified.

   This practice would facilitate a lot of processes and circumstances .Because of the (promptness) easy accessibility to/ availability of the personal information, people could avoid  difficult situations and possible dangers. A characteristic example would be a case of someone who experiences an allergy shock and due to the readily available information  on his their health that is visible with a simple scanning of their chip, COMMA HERE and others can help him/ them because they know his/their history . The resolution of this incident would be definitely faster, reducing the rate of risk .Another example would be the case of a thief that enters a shop and other people around him can see timely see his criminal record and be more alert ed. (so should everyone be alert simply because a person with a criminal record enters a shop or is this person there about to commit robbery? It is rather unclear.)

   Another vital reason that (I’m) I AM (no short forms!) in favor of the chip implant is the saving of time (and) as well as plastic or paper. NowAdays, COMMA (are spent) a lot of time is spent for the documents to be created .For example, COMMA when an entrepreneur wants to apply for a loan, they must devote time to explain at the administration of the bank what they owner they owe or how much money he has/ they have, although it would be much more easier for the bank to read the data of (ID) the microchip implant in a few seconds. Another also/equally significant (consumption) consideration is those the overconsumption of paper and plastic that are IS (uncountable!) necessary for the natural data common paper ID cards to be created and other data logs to be kept. From my personal experience, COMMA in my country citizens are obliged to show their ID plastic card ,documentation of their income , driver’s license or a documentation about their family circle if they are asked; SEMI COLON otherwise, COMMA they will pay a fine.

  It seems that (the establishment of this practice  have two basic reasons to happen)--> there are two basic reasons for establishing this practice/ microchip implantation. Governments of all over the world should realize that they must vote for practices that they will facilitate peoples’ life and, of course, they that will deter the environmental detriment/ damage.

Faye, I know your grammar is much better than this! Why are there still so many missing words, punctuation problems and wrong verbs? Take a careful look at my suggestions so that we can discuss them later. Practice makes perfect, so keep writing! Christina 💚

Implanted chips

Daily, ( unnecessary: more and more) the technology is evolving dramatically. Some of the new advancements are microchip s implants for humans. This is a new method that/ according to which all information (uncountable noun!) are is stored in a small gadget under the skin. The identity card could be replaced by the chip. Everything are is inside it. But this breakthrough can be very controversial. Some believe that it is beneficial and some of them others believe that there is surveillance by the goverNment and police in this way. As I see it, those chips have could constitute a good/ viable option, but the other option their drawbacks may be dangerous.

  Every day, more people refresh renew their identity card because they are lOsing them. If they have a microchip under their skin,then they would not have changed the to renew or reissue their cards at all times. Furthermore, the implantation of a microchip is a safe option for health and does not demand surgery. It is flexible for people because automatically all information IS included.  LAST BUT NOT LEAST,  society will definitely become  more secure because it will be extremely difficult for terrorists to have a genuine identity,and if people are not secure, they feel scared and they cannot enjoy anything else.

  As much as,On the one hand, microchips sound beneficial and practical, but on the other hand, they can be perilous to humanity in many different ways. (but the other option looks like dangerous). It is not difficult for criminals to use concealed scanners on a crowded subway train, for instance, to retrieve information on people's chips. Then, COMMA it would be quite straightforward for them to write their own chip and begin pretending to be you somebody else, thus committing identity theft. However, the most serious problem is that of breaching the human right for dignity and privacy, since it becomes easier for all governments to monitor their citizens. (It is more easy to monitor someone)The chips do not all allow to people living to live freely. Especially in case that our democracy gives way to a dictatorship, people’s moves will be thoroughly kept track of.

  Implanted chips (are already to enter) HAVE ALREADY ENTERED our lives. It is something different and we have to BE prepared for this. Microchips are practical and (enable the manner that we live) MAKE OUR LIVES EASIER, but we have the human right to privacy and we must don not allow OURSELVES to ignore this advantage because we live in a democracy and UNDER NO CIRCUMSTANCES ARE WE ALLOWED TO FORGET IT (we have do not forget it.)

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 Be careful when you refer to ‘the other option’. There is one issue you are discussing, that of microchip implantation, and this issue has two sides. You used this expression in your introduction too, which may confuse your readers greatly. Look at your introduction again. Isn’t your thesis (main opinion) now clearer?

Also pay attention to linking phrases. ‘As much as’ is used in sentences, like: As much as I try, my listening scores do not seem to improve. As much as somebody does something= no matter how hard they do it 

In the conclusion, some important grammatical mistakes created some confusion again. Take a look at my suggestions and we can talk about them again very soon.

I can see great improvement, though and I need to give you credit for it. If you continue this intensive effort, you will reap the benefits of your hard work! Keep improving, amazing athlete and blogger!

Christina 👏👏💝🎈🤩💌

Andromahi: Essay on the use of microchips

A great deal of controversy surrounds the issue of whether people should use implanted chip IDs or not. Rotterdam and Holland have already established this scheme. However, as I see it, there are some good/ strong points/ arguments against this practice.

On the plus side, microchips can be considered as a breakthrough technological invention. (Or: as a groundbreaking technological invention) Microchips which emplace are placed under the skin are designed to contain a digital record of all personal details. There is no doubt that an implanted ID chip has the capacity to facilitate the access to public services, bank accounts and the most importantly, nothing can be stolen or lost. But at the same time, people may not be in favor of reveal the revelation of such a sensitive personal data. (There could be a change of paragraph here) Unfortunately, it is a common phenomenon that people are to being asked to give/show/exhibit an ID card unexpectedly for a trivial reason. One may ask: Is the an place for privacy? Is the right to privacy being violated? This is to say that, COMMA but for technology, COMMA people 's lives WOULD NOT have been improved, COMMA but what people really need is privacy safety OR: the preservation of their privacy,this which can be called real progress. Governments should ensure the people' s personal lives and data have a fully their full protection. One way to succeed IN it is not TO reveal them IT (the noun data is uncountable) with merely a scan/ with a mere scan.

Moreover, another concern is connected with health issues. Because of heart problems and A weak immune system, COMMA many people are prone to illnesses; SEMI COLON as a result, COMMA no-one can  assure that those chips will not cause further hazard to them. It is of grave importance to make DO first some experiments in order to examine THE body's reaction. It is crucial to devote time TO scrutinizing this scheme prior to takING actioN.

All in all, it should be reiterated that microchip IMPLANTATION has its merits and demerits, WHICH everyone should be aware of (without them). (Why contrast here with Although?) Humanity’s first priorities should ALWAYS be public health and privacy. Only IN this way can human beings anticipate a brighter future.


Amazing Andromahi, I love your ideas and the way you express them. We need to work on grammar, punctuation and syntax more so that your sentences have an even more powerful impact on your readers. I am sure you understand all my corrections and that you know the grammar theory fully well. Putting theory into practice is very demanding and tricky, so a little more attention should be paid there. Keep writing, resourceful blogger! Practice makes perfect! Loads of love, Christina 💝

This is the original text.  Students can compare the two versions and add their comments below.

Essay of unit 6: A great deal of controversy surrounds the issue of whether people should use implanted chip ID or not. Rotterdam and Holland have already established this scheme. However, as i see it there are some good points against this practice.

On the plus side microchip can be considered as a breakthrough technological invention. Microchips which emplace under the skin are designed to contain a digital record of all personal details. There is no doubt that implanted ID chip has the capacity to facilitate the access to public services, bank accounts and the most important nothing can be stolen or lost. But at the same time people may not be in favor of reveal such a personal data. Unfortunately it is a common phenom to being asked to give ID card unexpectedly for a trivia reason. One may ask Is the an place for privacy? This is to say that but for technology people 's lives have been improved but what people really need is privacy safety,this can be called real progress. Government should ensure the people' s personal lives and data have a fully protection. One way to succeed it is not reveal them with merely a scan.

Moreover another concern is connected with health issues. Because of heart problems and weak immune system many people are prone to illnesses as a result non-one can  assure that those chips will not cause further hazard to them. It is of grave importance to make first some experiments in order to examine body's reaction. It is crucial to devote time on scrutinizing this scheme prior to take actions.

All in all, it should be reiterated that microchip has its merits and demerits, everyone should be aware of them. Although first priorities always should be public health and privacy. Only by this way can human beings anticipate a brighter future.

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Efficient public transport or well preserved roads?

An efficient level of transportation in towns requires both well preserved and safe roads and (an) effective means of public transport. If it would be necessary to choose one of the two options because of the financial limitation, (comma) I would choose a more efficient/ effective public transportation system for two specific reasons.

Public means of transport can be used by everyone in order to as long as they pay a fee for the ticket. This is greatly important because if the aforementioned would not exist, comma people would have to buy cars or bicycles, comma and this which is not affordable for some people. Owning a vehicle demands paying for fuel , for taxes and possible breakdowns, burdening the owners. Additionally, comma they can not everyone not everyone can drive for a lot of reasons. Some of them  do not have/ lack not the cognitive ability or physical ability, like/ such as blind people, and some others may do not want to learn how to drive; semi colon thus, comma the only way for them to be transported is within the public system. For this reason, the state must act for so that citizens to not be are not deprived from the convenience that is offered for by the public transportation system.

Another extremely important reason is the environmental aspect of the issue .Boosting the public means of transport has/ will certainly have a  positive impact in on the decrease of carbon dioxide emissions. This happens because the more improved the public means of transport are, comma the more people are motivated to use them and, in that way/ therefore/ hence some people avoid to use their own vehicles , thereby reducing the number of vehicles at/ on the roads. The authorities must definitely encourage people to use the public one (buses, trams or even trains) because instead of that otherwise a lot of people are inevitably going to use their owns own car, for example, while a lot of them want to be transported at the same place and time.

To sum up, it would be more convenient for citizens to have both a good/ proper/ immaculate road network and an adequate public transportation system, but the boost/ prioritization  of the later is gravely significant for individuals and the environment. Only by adopting greener policies and everyday practices, will humanity be able to anticipate a brighter future. 


Faye, your blogging effort is great. We will work a bit more on sentence structure, punctuation (be careful with that!), use of linking phrases and some advanced grammatical phenomena (inversion. inverted conditionals, cleft sentences), but overall, you stated your thesis (main opinion) in paragraph 1 and managed to justify it in the main body of the essay. Take a look at my corrections which we will discuss shortly. 

Christina 💕

International Women's Day seen from a different perspective

* Having watched the short film Sitara: Let Girls Dream on Netflix* 

"Sitara reminds us that every day, millions of young girls are forced into child rape, losing their ability to have a life that so many of us take for granted," Wengoff told Refinery29. "International Women's Day is a reminder of the work to be done to provide a better future for the next generation, before the bias of the patriarchy has claimed them. Our girls and boys can be anything they dream of, we just have to continue to remove the barriers.”

Related links:

- The complete version of the text above was found here, where you can also read the director’s interview: https://www.refinery29.com/en-us/2020/03/9514279/sitara-let-girls-dream-netflix-international-womens-day 

-The film’s official website: https://www.letgirlsdream.org 

-What are the universal human rights? - Benedetta Berti on Ted.ed

 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nDgIVseTkuE 

-Director Sharmeen Obaid-Chinoy Wants You To Learn Why Activism Is Fundamental

https://www.refinery29.com/en-us/2020/02/9436283/sharmeen-obaid-chinoy-activism-fundamental-docuseries-youtube 

- Sad statistics about child brides: https://www.refinery29.com/en-us/2019/03/226273/chelsea-clinton-child-marriage-laws-unchained-at-last-essay